![]() ![]() This is somewhat on par for Wattpad, but there would be entire chapters where only a few lines of dialogue would be punctuated correctly. ![]() That would feel strange for whatever reason, but I have a lot of thoughts about this book and I want to put it out somewhere.įirst of all, the grammar was not good. Sex scenes are pretty good though if you in it for the smut. I understand this is pretty common of Wattpad stories, but if the author wants her work to be taken seriously, she definitely needs to have someone proofread it, and she needs to explain things better without boring us to tears. And as much as I want to, the characters are pretty hard to like.Even the main characters. They need to offer backdrop for some of the decisions. There are plot holes that make zero sense other than the author just offering "Because I said so" explanations. It also drags on in some parts that don't need be, and in other parts it feels rushed. Poor word choices, and some words just all together missing from sentences. This story (along with the the other story The Alpha's Desire that I tried reading) are sloppy when it comes to the grammar. Teenager: You have made a good effort, but definitely see about getting a proofreader.ĮSOL: Again, you did a good effort, but find someone Fluent in English to proofread. Phone a friend for this because that will not translate the book well. I am not sure if this was sent through Google Translate, if a teenager wrote this, or if English is not their first language. It has a good idea, but it is executed poorly. Readers and reviews these days are hard to trust because slap a sex scene in a story and hundreds of people will tell you its amazing, regardless of the plot and writing. It seems people rave about it just because of the sex, and that is honestly so disappointing. This story is not one of those rare ones. People write for fun and rarely do you find a well-written story on there. The book is riddled with errors and inconsistencies, but since this is a Wattpad story I don't judge too harshly on that. She says she won't do one thing in the first sentence and the next sentence she'll do exactly what she said she won't. Who calls themselves weak every time they open their mouth? She has no respect for herself, and she can't make up her mind. Red's character was so inconsistent and irritating as hell. ![]() And then the creatures just come and snatch them off and leave. Women over the age of 18 were left out at night, blindfolded, barely wearing anything, left out for anyone to see while they stood alone and terrified. But I didn't like that it was quite literally human trafficking. So just because a story has "good sex scenes" it is good? That's such a damn shame. Character personality and development? Not relevant. It's honestly so sad that we live in a society where sex is the most important aspect of a story. If you can look past the translation, grammar and the choppy story line progression it’s actually quite entertaining (sometimes predictable) and easy read. Surprisingly the sex scenes were the best writing of the entire book but I would have also liked to see more development for the main characters’ relationship. The characters themselves had so much potential but I found myself craving more character development, which unfortunately fell short. The execution itself was quite choppy and I felt the story line a bit rushed, if not jumpy. I loved the idea of the plot and the world the author created which definitely kept me interested. ![]() The only thing that kept me going was that I actually spent money on the book not realizing there was a free copy on Wattpad (Thanks Facebook ad) I honestly have no words because “subpar” seems far too kind. There were so many grammar mistakes and the translation was. So this story has potential but it still has that heavy Wattpad/Fanfiction vibe and not exactly the more polished “published” vibe that I personally gear towards. ![]()
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